
Gingervitis 33
I've read many interactive books and this one doesn't really measure up. Some scenes are too dragged out and it doesn't really seem to draw you in to the world as most books I have read have. Most of these I finish in two to three days and this one is taking longer because I don't feel a strong connection to it. However the customizability of your Magikiras unit is amazing and I love it. Also the company is very strategic and the combination of those two and some decent writing earn it 4/5
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Daniel Shaw
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The setting is decent and the world building is interesting but the writing could definitely use some work. I can tell there's effort put into this so I'm going to give some advice to the wirter: 1. Less is more. If a word or a phrase is not needed, get rid of it. Unnecessary words make descriptions bland. 2. Related to 1, get rid of all the lines like 'you thought to yourself'. Don't use the text to generate the monolog, use the text AS the monolog.
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A Google user
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I rather enjoy the story, but for all of the choices you have it feels quite linear. That would be okay if the ending wasn't so underwhelming. I have no issue with an abrupt ending, but this just seems like the author lost interest and then admitted to as much. I am also not sure where the 1.1 million word count comes from, but that is not correct even when taking every choice into account. I thought I was missing something, so I checked the scene files, but there wasn't more to be found.
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